In order to have a strong thesis statement, I suggest walking through a couple of early steps to find out how you should approach it. For example, you might start with a simple statement:
I think abortion is ________.
Now, ask yourself why you feel that way. What have you read that informs your opinion? What could you use as evidence? After that, you might build on to it a little.
I think abortion is ________ because ________.
At this point, you should not only have your opinion on abortion, but also several reasons to support it. You're moving into thesis territory! However, remember that a thesis will always have a counterpoint. Especially a hot topic such as this one. You should include an acknowledgment of this. For example:
Although many believe that abortion is ____________, I think abortion is _________ because _____________.
Now we're getting somewhere! At this point, you have a thesis statement that is supported by reasons / evidence and includes a counterpoint. This is sufficiently complex and does multiple things for your readers: It tells them what you think on the issue, why you think that way, what a popular counterargument it, and it lays out a "map" for your essay.
A thesis statement is a sentence that includes your main opinion and your reasons why you believe in this reason. Remember that these reasons will make up the body of your paragraph.
So if my essay was about myself believing that Justin Beiber was secretly a girl, and my essay body would be about his dress, his hair, and his voice, my thesis statement could be:
I believer Justin Beiber is secretly a girl, based on that his clothes reflect what a girl could wear, his haircut is sported my many girls, and his voice is remarkebly similiar to a girl's voice.
A thesis statement doesn't have to be fancy. It just tell the reader what the essay will be about. But make sure the rest of you introductory paragraph is good!
I think that your thesis statement is great! But to make it stronger I would take out "and that the unborn doesn't share the same rights as humans" the "people" and the "the", change "is" to "are", and add "infants" after "unborn.
So your thesis would look like this: "Even though some believe that unborn infants are not yet a human being, I believe that abortion is morally wrong because it is murder, killing is always gravely wrong, and everyone has equal rights to life."
Hope I helped, good luck with your essay!
Cassie · 7 years ago